Thursday, 31 October 2013
The Snow Killer: Nearly ready
The book is nearly finished! Just some editing to do and then it's ready for print. It's going to be about 120 pages - not what you would call a novel, but I'm proud of it.
Keeping you posted,
Monday, 28 October 2013
UPDATE: The Snow Killer
Be excited my blogger-lovelies,
I am currently in the midst of Chapter Nine of "The Snow Killer", the thriller/mystery/murder/romance fictional book I have been writing.
Parts One to Five were published on my blogger page, and are available until New Years, or whenever I decide you've had enough of a sneak peak.
I will be printing said book at the beginning of November 2013, so please feel free to buy a copy. "The Snow Killer" is on sale for £8.99 in paperback. Please Tweet me @melissaholden94 for a copy, or email me @ melissah183@googlemail.com
- Mel.
I am currently in the midst of Chapter Nine of "The Snow Killer", the thriller/mystery/murder/romance fictional book I have been writing.
Parts One to Five were published on my blogger page, and are available until New Years, or whenever I decide you've had enough of a sneak peak.
I will be printing said book at the beginning of November 2013, so please feel free to buy a copy. "The Snow Killer" is on sale for £8.99 in paperback. Please Tweet me @melissaholden94 for a copy, or email me @ melissah183@googlemail.com
- Mel.
Thursday, 24 October 2013
The Snow Killer: Update 25/10/2013
Just to let you know....
Hi Blogger,
It's 4AM in England, and I've just finished Chapter Five of "The Snow Killer". I'm currently on 10, 435 word count, and am aiming for a total of 25,000.
"The Snow Killer" will be removed at the end of November, to to copyright issues, so if you haven't read Draft One, Parts 1-5, then get moving, because they won't be there for long.
Thank you for all your support,
Mel.
Hi Blogger,
It's 4AM in England, and I've just finished Chapter Five of "The Snow Killer". I'm currently on 10, 435 word count, and am aiming for a total of 25,000.
"The Snow Killer" will be removed at the end of November, to to copyright issues, so if you haven't read Draft One, Parts 1-5, then get moving, because they won't be there for long.
Thank you for all your support,
Mel.
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The Snow Killer: Announcement
Hi blog-readers!
As you might have noticed, "The Snow Killer" has had Parts 1 - 5 released.
This post is to tell you that this was a PREVIEW for all my followers, and that no more parts will be uploaded. I will still blog about the actual writing experience, and go indepth to the inspiration behind the plot, but no more sneak previews. If I put the whole thing on here, no one will need to buy it!
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As you might have noticed, "The Snow Killer" has had Parts 1 - 5 released.
This post is to tell you that this was a PREVIEW for all my followers, and that no more parts will be uploaded. I will still blog about the actual writing experience, and go indepth to the inspiration behind the plot, but no more sneak previews. If I put the whole thing on here, no one will need to buy it!
My aim is to have the book finished by Dec 1st, as I'm having it printed by blurb.co.uk. The next step is to publish it on Amazon.co.uk, and actually sell a few copies.
Keeping you posted,
Mel.
Tuesday, 22 October 2013
The Snow Killer: Part Five
This is Post 50 for my blog, what a mile stone. But it is also Part Five on The Snow Killer! Part Five is from Diane Warner's perspective:
The Snow Killer: Part Five
Diane walked out the
main door of the pub, and headed east to find a taxi. She walked for a few
minutes before she saw any sign of a waiting cabby. They always avoid
this part of town; don't want pick up any students. I don't blame them. They
make so much noise. She waved him down and climbed in.
"Where to, love?
Time'n half 'cause of the snow."
"Yes, it's fine.
Westgate Drive. No rush."
"Yes,
ma'am." The cab driver switched the overhead light off and started the
engine. Diane sank into the back seat. She had always hated cabs, but she
couldn't drive when she'd been drinking, and it was freezing, so there was no
point fussing.
She thought about the
boy, the boy with the blonde hair and the cut-glass cheekbones. She closed her
eyes and he was there; kissing her; whispering deep, love-filled words into her
ear. Danny looked like the boy a little bit.
"He's gone, stop
thinking about him. He isn't going to come back to you. Jerry made sure of
that. So, stop thinking about him." She whispered to herself.
"You alright,
love? Bit of boyfriend trouble?"
"Nah, a bit of
husband trouble, mate." Diane scolded herself for speaking like that. She
hated pretending she was common, but it stopped her feeling superior most of
the time, knowing that everyone around her thought she was a common housewife
from the estate, instead a posh housewife with a criminal for a husband.
Westgate Drive was
certainly not an estate. 23 Westgate Drive, Canterbury. She had lived in
Canterbury nearly all her life, in that exact house, for 35 years. Diane loved
that house more than anything.
23 Westgate Drive was
the smallest house amongst the 50 houses that surrounded it, because it was sandwiched
between two great manor houses. Number 23 was a faded duck-egg blue, with
silver woodwork and a dark-stained oak door. Mrs Tabatha Finn died in 1954 and
left it for Diane's great uncle, a Mr Roger Tate. When her uncle died of an
unsuspected heart attack, Diane's parents inherited the house, who in turn left
it to Diane for when she married and started a family.
Diane met her husband
six months before they got married. She had fallen in love with him, with his
beautiful violet eyes and the shiny auburn hair. But, like the flame of his
mane; Jerry had a temper.
"I said I'm
sorry, baby. I'm so sorry. Please don't leave me, Bunny." Jerry kissed his
young wife, stopping tears in their tracks and tasting the salt of the pain he
had caused. He brushed his thumb across the cut on her forehead and whispered
at her. "I'm so sorry, Diane. I don't know why I did it. I just felt so
angry. I just wanted to hold you."
"All I said was
that I was tired. Why did you throw a book at me?" Diane's voice was cold,
like Jerry's touch.
"To teach you a
lesson, baby." Jerry's violet eyes darkened as they bore into Diane's
white face. He grabbed her hair and jolted her head backwards, so he towered
above her. "You never say no to me. Got it? I own you: you are my wife. I
know you've been messing around, Di. I won't stand for any wife of mine messing
around with some marine on the side. You got it, sweet cheeks?"
The anger filled
Diane as she sat in the back of the taxi. Part of her just wanted to scream at
the cabby to stop and take her back to the pub; to drown in a pool of tequila
and her own tears. But, she couldn't. She never would.
That boy poor. Poor
Jamie. He didn't have to hurt you. I know he says he didn't but I know him. I
know what he did you and your pretty face. Carved it off is what he did, I know
it. He's such a brute. But I can't go. I can't leave my beautiful house and all
of Mamma's things. I need her things to feel safe.
"I don't know
why you're with him, Anne. I see the way he looks at you. It's like you're a dog
that he can just kick when it misbehaves. Leave him, Anne. Please, leave
him." Sophie begged her eldest daughter, but she knew any promise of
Diane's was empty. She had been empty for a long time.
"I will Mamma, I
promise. But not yet, we have the Robinsons' twins boys christening on
Saturday, and then the social on Tuesday, and-"
"Your social
calendar isn't an excuse for what he does to you, Anne. You know that
right?" Sophie watched Diane look at her perfectly manicured hands, and
simply say:
"But, Mamma, he
can't cope without me. He's not even sure how to put on a cravat. He needs me,
Mamma."
"You don't need
him. By lord, if your father was still here..."
"Well, he isn't.
So, I'm going home to my husband, to cook his dinner and feed the dog."
"Does he kick
the dog as much as he kicks you?"
Diane slammed the
taxi door and walked up the drive. She stopped, as always at the post box. A
sign of a happier time in their marriage: two blue hand prints on a black box
attached to the porch's brick wall. The painted flecked off onto her
fingertips. She brushed away the layer of snow covered the top of the post-box,
and wiped her hands across the cheap coat.
Diane took the coat
off, and folded it gently into her handbag. She stood at her front door in full
business attire, and unlocked the oak door. "Jerry? Are you home? Sorry, I
missed dinner..." Diane laughed at her own sarcasm as she shut the heavy door behind her and waved the snow
off of her suit jacket. She removed her shoes and placed them in the shoe rack
to the left of the door. Walking upstairs, she unfolded the coat and approached
a locked cupboard opposite the top of the stairs. She pulled out a set of keys,
opened the cupboard and put the coat neatly on a hanger. As she walked towards
her bedroom, she heard a woman's voice.
"Jerry, I hear
someone. I think it's your wife. You said she was out of town?" Diane
paused outside Jerry's bedroom door, and grinning, knocked on, and then opened the
door.
"Jerry dear, is
this one staying for tea, or should I fetch her coat?"
"Fuck off,
Di." Diane exited the room to avoid the pillow Jerry had just flung at the door and headed for her own bedroom. Using the set
of keys once more, she unlocked the white panelled door and went inside.
The room was a pale yellow, decorated with delicate floral ornaments. A beech laminate floor lay beneath a fluffy chocolate-coloured rug, and to the right of the rug sat a small round table, covered with lace, and on top: a canary yellow circular vase donning twelve red roses. Diane looked at the roses and sighed.
"I suppose I should throw them now he's gone, but they are quite beautiful." As she placed her keys back in her bag, Jerry entered the room.
"Are you talking to yourself again? Crazy old-"
"And why exactly are you in my doorway, Jerald?"
"To accept your apology for storming in on me and Janine." He shrugged at her.
"I haven't apologised, Jerry."
"Yeah, but ya gonna." Jerry winked and strode across the small room; pushing her against the tall white wardrobe. "You interrupted my big finish, Di. I think you owe me at least that much?"
"Is she still in your bed, Jerry? Did you leave her there to come beat your wife up and then go fuck her?" Diane spat at the gorilla in front of her.
"You think you're so high and mighty don't ya, Di? I'm gonna bring you down a peg or two." Jerry grasped her neck with his right hand and pushed her back harder. The glass of the wardrobe's mirrored door smashed, and Diane felt the glass bury itself into her shoulder.
"Get out of here, Jerry, before I get angry." She smirked at him, and looked into the violet eyes that haunted her dreams. "Do you think I care who you sleep with? I don't give a shit. Just make sure they're gone by the time I get home."
"Well, I would, but you're never here. Always out drinking your weight in vodka. Where do you go, eh Di? Kicking it out in the slums with the poor boys? Eh? Got a little bit of a Mrs. Robinson thing going on? Promise them the world? Yeah, I think you do."
"Stop it, Jer."
"Ouch, did I touch a nerve?" Jerry looked down Diane's body as the blood soaked her crisp white blouse. "Or was it an artery? What was his name, do you remember? James Maccersfield, 26. God, Di. They're getting young, aren't they?"
"Wasn't that Janine from down the market? You know she's 17, right? Cradle robbing was always your style. At least you're consistent, I'll give you that much." Jerry shoved her on to the bed, still holding her neck.
"Don't you ever shut up, Di? You always make me hurt you. Every time: it's your fault, Diane. You're just as weak as your mother: You're pathetic, the pair of ya." Jerry picked up a photo frame from the bedside cabinet. "I'll tell you one thing though: she was a piece, your dear old Mum. I wouldn't say no to that face." He smashed the frame on the corner of the cabinet, and dragged the picture out of the broken glass. "Not looking so good now is she? Blood on her face and glass through her tits. Looks a lot like you last month, doesn't she, Di?" He bit her cheek and she screamed. The blood ran hot down her face.
You can do this. You know you can do this. It's your home. It's your bedroom. Kick him out.
Diane kicked her husband in the shins, hard enough for him to recoil in pain. She stood smartly from the bed and straightened her pencil skirt. She picked up Jerry's shirt collar, and pulled him to the bedroom door. "Goodnight, Jerry. That's enough blood for one day".
And that's Part Five!
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The Snow Killer - Part Four
In demand of several relatives and a few like-minded friends, I am aiming to finish this novel, and publish it through blurb.co.uk, before Christmas in order to deliver (and sign on my mother's request) copies of my book as presents. I then plan to sell them (hopefully) in small bookstores and possibly on amazon.co.uk.
We left Danny just after he committed a terrible crime: let's see what happens next...
Danny climbed into the shower and let the water burn him.
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The Snow Killer: Part Four
Danny rushed around the corner, and
started to head home. After a few moments of frantic walking, he stopped in his
tracks.
What if someone
saw me?
Danny looked
around him, but calmed down somewhat when he realised he was the only one in
the street. It made sense: it was the middle of the night. In the snow. Alone.
Freezing.
She was blue.
She turned blue so quickly. And her eyes...
Breathe in.
Breathe out. Breathe in. Breathe out.
As Danny started
walking again, tugging his jacket closer in a failed attempt to take the chill
off the skin. But he knew the chill had nothing to do with the white snow that
surrounded him.
All that
blood...
Danny walked
faster as he thought about what he should do. His feet near-running, carrying
him home - faithful to him when his mind wasn't.
I should turn
myself in. I can't just leave her there to be buried in the snow: they might
not find her for days. She has a family...
The snow
whispered to Danny as he trod:
Killer. Left the
girl in the snow. Snow killer. You hate the snow. Emily loved the snow. She
danced in the snow. Killer. You killed Emily. You killed the girl. You killed
your mother.
"No!"
Danny panted. "I'm running away from snow! Snow can't talk. What's
wrong with me?" He grabbed fistfuls of his hair underneath his hood, and
crouched to the floor. The words echoed around his head. They burned like
a cold star: impossible anywhere but his mind. He had always known it was his
fault, but it was an accident. This was different. This was by his own hand,
his own physical hands had taken the life of a sixteen year old girl. She
looked just like Emily. But prettier. The girl had rejected him
immediately.
Why? What is so
wrong with me? Emily had always been the best of both of us, but I never had
any trouble before she died...
Danny remembered
his father's words just seconds after they buried Emily and Sara side-by-side.
"You let them smother you. You're a man now; you need to rid yourself
of all these ideas of a happy, care-free life and focus on getting a job,
making a businessman out of yourself."
"It's just
not logical to have your head in the clouds. Sara always let you get away with
it. All the writing and painting and what-not. Girl's stuff."
"I should
have sent you to boarding school, but Sara always molly-coddled you. She said
it would upset you too much. That you were fragile. You're not right in the
head, boy. She made sure of that. Ruining my only son. Sometimes I feel like I
have two daughters instead of one."
"You
couldn't just be normal, like Emily, could you? Such a pretty girl. Always did
what she was told. But you, well, I'm glad I will be seeing the back of this
ridiculous behaviour. You are not your sister. You are a man. That I'll make
sure of. Oh, stop crying. They are gone and there's nothing you can do about
it."
The words kept
going in Danny's head, even though he tried so hard to banish them, pressing
his hands into his eyes and seeing the burning colours of his skin against the
fragile lids that protected him from the pain. But they didn't. His eyes may
have closed to the world, but his brain wouldn't let go. All he could see was
the girl, blue skin against fragile white snow. Her long blonde hair darkened
by the blood. The blood was everywhere.
Danny stopped
again: The blood was everywhere: All over his hands; in his hair; on his skin;
dried into his clothes; across his lips; buried into the ridges of his
fingerprints. He pulled his jacket off and searched for a lighter.
I gave it to Diane.
"Fuck!"
Danny ripped the jacket in to pieces and put different pieces in different bins
on his way home. The last bin was Mrs. Roberts, the old woman that lived next
door. He lived on the top floor of a maisonette in Winston Close. A dark building,
cornered by other houses: being bullied. Upon taking the rooms, the landlady
had commented on the pale of his skin: "Well
you'll fit in here Mr. Fores, no light in this house. You'll always have the
lights on. Unless you like the dark..."
He unlocked the
door and pushed hard on the frame. Always
sticking. The money I pay... Danny caught himself: thinking about such trivial
things when I am covered in blood. He ran up the stairs to his apartment,
opened the door and locked it behind him. He padded to the bathroom and turned
the shower on. The steam rose, taking that first layer of ice from his heart.
He went back into the bedroom/living room/study and took off his clothes.
Everything was dark with blood. He turned the bedside lamp on to look at the
mess.
It's
everywhere.
He could see the
handprints of the girl on his jeans, she had struggled. He had panicked and
pushed back. He shook himself, don't think about it, and put the clothes in the
bin.
"Oh,
Daniel, you stupid boy: falling over. Now that's your best shirt ruined, look
at this, there’s blood everywhere. Oh, and you tore straight through the
elbows. What an earth were you doing in that tree anyway?"
"I was
watching a bird, Mummy. It was so beautiful, and it was signing. I drew it,
Mummy, look". The young Danny attempted in vain to show his mother his
sketches.
"Not now
Danny, Emily needs her lunch. Go and wash up, no more climbing trees, now,
y'hear?"
"Yes,
Mummy." Danny looked to his feet, but was filled with glee moments later
when his father walked through the door.
"Daddy,
look, I drew a -"
"Not now,
Daniel. What's wrong, Sara?" Marcus kissed his wife's cheek and took the
shirt from her hands.
"Your son
was out in the woods today." Sara shot her husband a scornful look.
"Really,
well boy, what happened here?" He held up the shirt.
"i was in a
tree, Daddy. I was-"
"Climbing
trees, finally. Just be more careful next time, kiddo. OK?"
"Well, yes
Daddy but-"
"Sara,
where's my dinner?"
"How should
I know, I've been watching the damned kids all day. Daniel, go play with your
sister."
"Sara, I've
been at work all day! all I want is a goddamn fucking meal when I get home from
work. Is that so much to ask?" Marcus stood up from the armchair he had
just occupied and approached his wife. "Is it, Sara? Just a bit of dinner.
Not difficult is it? All you do is sit around and drink. Maybe next time you
could make my-"
Sara slapped her
husband across the face, and stood trembling in front of him. Marcus shoved her
against the wall, making her drop the plate she had been holding.
"Now look
what you've done, you stupid cow. Made a mess. You're going to clean that up,
aren't you, Sara?" Tears ran down her face as her husband’s breath hit her
lips.
"Is that
Chanel I smell, Marcus. My , my, you have gone up in taste." The fear in
her eyes diminished her thinly veiled threat.
"That's enough!
Clean this mess up." He released his grip on her shoulders and sat back
down.
Sara cleaned up
the broken shards of china, and threw them away. She had stopped crying by the
time she brought Marcus a beer. She smiled sweetly at him and kissed him on the
cheek.
"Danny was
a smart boy today, climbing up that tree. Shame he did it to draw. Kid needs to
learn to man up a little bit. It was only a shirt, Sara. Just buy him another
one and shut up about it, OK?"
"OK."
She smiled again.
Danny remembered
that day so well: the first time he had ever seen his parents fight. It was
only years later he had found out it had been happening since he was born. They
had wanted a girl, not a boy. Sara never wanted a boy.
"He'll end
up like you, you know. I don't want any son of mine being violent to women.
He's not a coward."
"He is a
coward, Marcus. He's your son."
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Monday, 21 October 2013
The Snow Killer: Part Three
1260 words, so much is said between the lines. Let's see what Danny does next:
The Snow Killer: Part Three
Danny took
a swig of his drink and rushed out to follow her, to find she was already gone.
He swore under his breath at the snowflakes that landed on his iced skin, and
pulled his hood up over his short dirt-blonde hair.
Rush. Rush. Rush.
It’s only snow. It’s not the same snow. Every snowflake is
different. They aren’t the same ones.
Danny
searched for a lighter in his jacket, before remembering he’d given in to
Diane.
Rush. Rush. Rush.
But they could be. They could have seen it all. They know it
was my fault.
He turned
the corner, bumping into a man in a leather jacket.
“Sorry, you
alright, mate?” The man had a strange look on his face.
He knows.
Pump. Pump. Pump.
They know I killed Emily and Mum. They were there.
Rush. Pump.
It was the snows fault. I couldn’t stop the car.
Rush. Pump. Rush. Pump.
I shouldn’t have been driving.
Rush. Rush. Rush. Rush. Rush. Rush. Rush. Rush. Rush.
I couldn’t drive, Mum knew that.
“You need to practise, Danny, otherwise you’ll never pass,
and then I’ll have to keep driving you everywhere.”
“Emily will pass before you do.”
“You should have learned when you were seventeen like all the
other kids.”
“No, Mum,
don’t let me drive.” Danny stopped abruptly and slammed his back against the
outer-wall of the block of flats on Spring Lane. “You shouldn’t have let me
drive.” Danny began to sob, but stopped when he heard a voice.
“Oh my god,
Jen, there’s some beggar crying. Yeah. It’s a guy. I know right. I feel so bad
for him, like, ‘cause it’s snowing and everything. I better go, Joe’s picking
me up. Piss off, he’s my brother!”
Danny moved
to see where the estranged voice was coming from, and realized it was the girl
from the pub on the phone. He watched as she put her phone away and moved
towards a lamppost. As she leaned against it, she pulled her thin jacket around
her, and looked around.
They were
at the edge of a council estate, in the middle of the night, and it was
snowing.
Hardly a safe place to wait, stupid cow – doesn’t she know
anything about Stranger Danger?
Pump. Pump. Pump.
The girl fidgeted
in the cold but kept looking up at the sky, as if wondering where the snow
comes from.
If she realises I’m here, she’s gonna go nuts.
Danny tried
to stand up, but slipped down the wall and crashed into a bin.
“What the
fuck was that?” The girl moved in to the light more, and Danny saw just how
young she really was. She couldn’t have been more than nineteen.
Emily is nineteen in March.
Danny
caught himself before he could think about her again, but his grip on his own
mind was weak.
She was so young. So pretty. Everyone loved her.
He looked
at the ditzy girl in front of him, and noticed her hair: it shone in the light
of the flickering street lamp. She was fair, but not sickly pale, like Danny. When
he was younger, his mother was always telling him to go out in the sun and play
with the other kids.
“Who’s
there? I’m calling the cops if you don’t come out right now!” Her voice trembled like a crying child. “Now,
dammit!” She screeched.
Rush. Rush. Rush.
Danny
walked towards her, holding up his hands in surrender.
“Whoa, OK, I’m coming out. I wasn’t watching
you I swear, I just-“
Rush. Rush. Rush.
“Oh my
days, it’s you: you’re the creepy bloke from the pub. You’re stalking me!” The
girl stepped back.
Rush. Rush. Rush.
“No, No,
seriously I’m not. I was just walking home, I swear.” He lowered his arms, and
stepped towards her again.
This is beginning to look like a tango. Backwards, forwards. Backwards,
forwards.
Rush. Rush. Rush.
Shut the fuck up, will you, so I can go home?
“Well then
why were you hiding behind a bin? No sane person stalks anyone. You must be
some psycho freak. Stalking girls in the snow.” She tried to stand firm, but
her legs buckled beneath her and she fell into the quickly forming bed of snow
behind her.
Rush. Rush. Rush.
Not the snow. It’s always the snow.
“Will you shut up about the weather? I’m not fucking stalking you.”
Rush. Rush. Rush.
“Yes you are: an attractive woman out on her own. I rejected you. You
thought it would be funny to come and scare me. Well I’m not scared, Freak.”
She spat the last word at him.
“Shut up” The words of a petulant child with no anger but his own.
Rush. Rush. Rush.
“Freak. Leave me alone.” She
scrambled back against a wall, and tried to stand up. Danny got closer and
closer.
Stop talking.
“HELP! HELP ME HEL-“Danny covered her mouth with his hand.
RUSH. Da. Dum. RUSH. Da. Dum. RUSH.
Da. Dum.
“Shut the fuck up. What are you trying to pull? Flirting with men and
then accusing them of stalking you. I bet you’re not even old enough to be in a
fucking pub.” He gripped her mouth with his palm; his nails digging in to her
milk skin.
She’s so beautiful.
RUSH. Da. Dum. RUSH. Da. Dum. RUSH.
Da. Dum.
The girl mumbled beneath his hand, and a warm expulsion of breath
tickled his skin.
“Stop talking. Do you ever stop talking?”
RUSH. Da. Dum. RUSH. Da. Dum. RUSH.
Da. Dum.
The girl tried to scream, which panicked Danny.
“Please stop talking. You talked about the snow. The snow hates me. Please,
make it stop, please.” Danny sobbed hysterically. The girl’s eyes widened, and
she tried to scream once more.
RUSH. Da. Dum. RUSH. Da. Dum. RUSH.
Da. Dum.
Danny jolted his hand in panic, smashing her head against the bricks
behind her head.
RUSH. Da. Dum. RUSH. Da. Dum. RUSH.
Da. Dum.
She cried out in pain. Every noise she made was mumbled. She couldn’t breathe.
There was blood everywhere.
RUSH. Da. Dum. RUSH. Da. Dum. RUSH.
Da. Dum.
Danny pulled his hand away from her mouth and frantically tried to bring
her back. He pounded his clenched hands against her silvery top.
“Breathe you bitch, fucking breathe.”
RUSH. Da. Dum. RUSH. Da. Dum. RUSH.
Da. Dum. RUSH. Da. Dum. RUSH. Da. Dum. RUSH. Da. Dum. RUSH. Da. Dum. RUSH. Da.
Dum. RUSH. Da. Dum.
“BREATHE” He grabbed her shoulders and shook her furiously; her head
hitting the wall. Slam. Slam. Slam. More blood.
So much blood from such a tiny
person.
“Please stop.”
RUSH. Da. Dum. RUSH. Da. Dum. RUSH.
Da. Dum.
Danny dropped the girl’s body, and looked around for her bag. He pulled
out a pink purse and a silver flip-phone. He fished out her I.D, looking for a
name. He found a provisional driver’s licence.
Fuck. She’s sixteen. Oh my
god, she’s fucking sixteen.
Tears escaped his eyes, burning as the cold and the wet hit his cheeks.
RUSH. Da. Dum. RUSH. Da. Dum. RUSH.
Da. Dum.
“Lily Addams.” He looked from the I.D to the girl. I.D to the girl. I.D
to the girl. I.D to the girl.
RUSH. Da. Dum. RUSH. Da. Dum. RUSH.
Da. Dum.
Danny dropped the I.D card in the snow.
She looks just like Emily.
Rush. Rush. Rush.
Danny put everything back in the purse, and lay it next to the girl. He
placed her blue hands on top of her stomach, and left her to sleep in the snow.
"Snow Killer" current word count: 2,355 / 40,000 (est finished count)
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Sunday, 20 October 2013
The Snow Killer - Part Two
We left our two main characters in a bar, lets see where they go.
Didn't read Part One? http://melissaholden94.blogspot.co.uk/2013/10/the-snow-killer-first-installment.html
The Snow Killer, Part Two
"There you go, Diane. Enough ice for you?"
Hopefully it'll help her cool off of me a little.
"Yeah, it's fine, sweetheart. Now come cosy up down here next to me." Diane patted the space next to her with her left hand, and picked up the drink with her right.
Or not...
"I'm fine over here." As he spoke, he pulled out the wooden chair, placed his drink on the table, and sat down.
She's not that bad looking from this angle...
"So, kiddo, who was the broad?"
Pump. Pump. Pump.
"No one. Just some bitch I met earlier."
Rush. Rush. Rush.
"Ah, I geddit. She reject-"
Pump. Rush. Pump. Rush. Pump. Rush. "She didn't reject me!" Danny slammed his palm down onto the beer-covered table between them.
Pump. Rush. Pump. Rush. Pump. Rush.
"Hey - don't lose it with me, or I'll lose it with you, got it sweetheart?" Diane became cold and stern. Like his mother.
Pump. Pump. Pump.
Danny looked down at the table, and stared for a moment at the shot glasses in front of him. After a brief silence, he handed Diane one of the tequila shots and simply said: "Cheers?"
"OK kid, cheers". They clinked glasses and swallowed the amber liquid.
The burn. That's what did it for him, not the taste, but the feeling of fire running down his throat. The fire calmed him when it should have enticed him. But Danny had always been made aggressive by much simpler things than alcohol.
Breathe in. Breathe out. Breathe in. Breathe out.
Diane suddenly pointed at the window to the left of her, "Hey, look: it's snowing".
Da. Dum. Da. Dum. Da. Dum.
She sounded young; as if it was her first snow. Her face glowed in the dark pub. Danny saw (for the first time in the moments they had known each other) what kind of woman she really was: not a stubborn, angry old woman, but a scared girl in need of a friend.
Why else do you ask a stranger to go to the pub, if not to avoid going home?
Da. Dum. Da. Dum. Da. Dum.
Da. Dum. Da. Dum. Da. Dum.
Da. Dum. Da. Dum. Da. Dum.
"I need to go," Danny watched Diane's face darken as he spoke. Feeling guilty, he said, "Ya'know, just because of the snow. I'll walk you back if you like?"
Da. Dum. Da. Dum. Da. Dum.
She shot him a weak smile, finished her drink and stood up. "It's alright kid, I'm getting a cab." She smile again, and grabbed Danny's hand. Diane pulled a pen from her pocket and scrawled her phone number into the palm of his hand. "Gimme a call sometime. Everyone needs a bit of company, and I get the feeling you need it more than most". And with that, she walked out.
Pump. Pump. Pump.
Danny was left sat at the table feeling frustrated.
Pump. Pump. Pump.
She doesn't know anything about me.
Rush. Rush. Rush.
He took a mouthful from his drink.
Da. Dum. Da. Dum. Da. Dum.
I should have walked her home. Cabs aren't that safe.
Well that's PART TWO finished with, I can't wait for you all to read PART THREE!
- Mel
Didn't read Part One? http://melissaholden94.blogspot.co.uk/2013/10/the-snow-killer-first-installment.html
The Snow Killer, Part Two
"There you go, Diane. Enough ice for you?"
Hopefully it'll help her cool off of me a little.
"Yeah, it's fine, sweetheart. Now come cosy up down here next to me." Diane patted the space next to her with her left hand, and picked up the drink with her right.
Or not...
"I'm fine over here." As he spoke, he pulled out the wooden chair, placed his drink on the table, and sat down.
She's not that bad looking from this angle...
"So, kiddo, who was the broad?"
Pump. Pump. Pump.
"No one. Just some bitch I met earlier."
Rush. Rush. Rush.
"Ah, I geddit. She reject-"
Pump. Rush. Pump. Rush. Pump. Rush. "She didn't reject me!" Danny slammed his palm down onto the beer-covered table between them.
Pump. Rush. Pump. Rush. Pump. Rush.
"Hey - don't lose it with me, or I'll lose it with you, got it sweetheart?" Diane became cold and stern. Like his mother.
Pump. Pump. Pump.
Danny looked down at the table, and stared for a moment at the shot glasses in front of him. After a brief silence, he handed Diane one of the tequila shots and simply said: "Cheers?"
"OK kid, cheers". They clinked glasses and swallowed the amber liquid.
The burn. That's what did it for him, not the taste, but the feeling of fire running down his throat. The fire calmed him when it should have enticed him. But Danny had always been made aggressive by much simpler things than alcohol.
Breathe in. Breathe out. Breathe in. Breathe out.
Diane suddenly pointed at the window to the left of her, "Hey, look: it's snowing".
Da. Dum. Da. Dum. Da. Dum.
She sounded young; as if it was her first snow. Her face glowed in the dark pub. Danny saw (for the first time in the moments they had known each other) what kind of woman she really was: not a stubborn, angry old woman, but a scared girl in need of a friend.
Why else do you ask a stranger to go to the pub, if not to avoid going home?
Da. Dum. Da. Dum. Da. Dum.
Da. Dum. Da. Dum. Da. Dum.
Da. Dum. Da. Dum. Da. Dum.
"I need to go," Danny watched Diane's face darken as he spoke. Feeling guilty, he said, "Ya'know, just because of the snow. I'll walk you back if you like?"
Da. Dum. Da. Dum. Da. Dum.
She shot him a weak smile, finished her drink and stood up. "It's alright kid, I'm getting a cab." She smile again, and grabbed Danny's hand. Diane pulled a pen from her pocket and scrawled her phone number into the palm of his hand. "Gimme a call sometime. Everyone needs a bit of company, and I get the feeling you need it more than most". And with that, she walked out.
Pump. Pump. Pump.
Danny was left sat at the table feeling frustrated.
Pump. Pump. Pump.
She doesn't know anything about me.
Rush. Rush. Rush.
He took a mouthful from his drink.
Da. Dum. Da. Dum. Da. Dum.
I should have walked her home. Cabs aren't that safe.
Well that's PART TWO finished with, I can't wait for you all to read PART THREE!
- Mel
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Thursday, 17 October 2013
The Dragon Statues
Stemming from my "Kent Connections" lecture this evening (it finished at 7:00 pm), I have written a short Dickens-based description piece about the dragon statues that feature in two of the photos( see "Home").
These dragons were purchased by me for my step-dad for his birthday (or Christmas, I can't quite remember) last year. It explores the idea of mystical beings and dragon-lore, whilst attempting to include extended (sort of) metaphors and just general description. This was written in three minutes, and minus some type-up, has not been edited.
The fire-breathers, as they once were: a tall and proud mystical creature; stood side-by-side-by-side upon the dust. Bright young colours dimming their natural beauty - black stones where emeralds should shine.
They have no princess to guard, only dust.
They are regarded as a proud creature, but how could one be proud if made of stone and the stroke of a machines mechanical brush?
Not loving; not adoring; not even fully aware of the presence of such magnificence: are the dragon owners, but rather: consciously observant of two-inch tall "cute" dragon statues on a forgotten mantelpiece, out of reach to anyone with the imagination to love them.
These dragons were purchased by me for my step-dad for his birthday (or Christmas, I can't quite remember) last year. It explores the idea of mystical beings and dragon-lore, whilst attempting to include extended (sort of) metaphors and just general description. This was written in three minutes, and minus some type-up, has not been edited.
The fire-breathers, as they once were: a tall and proud mystical creature; stood side-by-side-by-side upon the dust. Bright young colours dimming their natural beauty - black stones where emeralds should shine.
They have no princess to guard, only dust.
They are regarded as a proud creature, but how could one be proud if made of stone and the stroke of a machines mechanical brush?
Not loving; not adoring; not even fully aware of the presence of such magnificence: are the dragon owners, but rather: consciously observant of two-inch tall "cute" dragon statues on a forgotten mantelpiece, out of reach to anyone with the imagination to love them.
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Home
Home, a set on Flickr.
This is a project I did for my Kent Connections lecture @ Canterbury Christ Church University. It had to be images of our home, and what made it home for us. A little background info for you: my mother and her partner run a pub in Dartford, and that is where I consider my home to be. It is a lovely pub that I have ten years of memories of.
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